So I recently posted a snippet of my writing and got some fantastic feedback. Despite Rusty's comment that said "boy you must have a thick skin to post some writing here," or something like that (not a direct quote) I actually do have a thick skin and am rather proud of that fact. But honestly, I think that I was able to improve that scene that I posted so much from the feedback that if I could, I would totally want that on every page. That of course isn't possible.But I do feel comfortable in asking one other small favor.I've been working on OCULUS, which is the sequel to SLIPSTREAM, and I want to get the blurb for the book solidified. Think of this as kinda similar to a query letter I think...only without all the Dear Agent and this book has so and so word count and all that jazz. Or, think of it as an extremely short synopsis. Maybe that's a better word. But it needs to grab or be interesting or have zing!I know it doesn't have that yet.So I'd like to post it here for you to look at and tell me what I should do to make it better. It's 250~ words right now. Here it is:
Fall semester has arrived for the Ivy League, and Jordan Pendragon attends his first classes as a freshman at Cornell. Born with a brilliant mathematical mind, he strives to balance a life as a research assistant with that of a student athlete playing ice hockey for the Big Red.
But Jordan has another agenda. He combs the data strings for a specific signature belonging to the rare earth element neodymium. Used to make essential magnets in all electronics, the presence of neodymium will give Jordan a search area to begin his quest for the Black Tower, a monolithic edifice housing a thing that defines the very structure of the universe. As large as a mountain, Jordan believes it is buried somewhere in Antarctica under miles of prehistoric ice.
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